Cliffs are scary… have you ever almost fell off a cliff? One day as a family we decided to go for a drive, we drove around and saw a cliff was a really nice view so we pulled over, got out and the car and went to go take a look. As soon as I stood out the car, I inhaled a huge scent of ocean as the wind hit my lips, I tasted the salty sea air. I was walking over to my family and felt the blazing sun beating down on my face. A seagull squawked looking over something… probably food. I watched the waves in the distance.
I wanted to see over the cliff to see what was at the bottom. I slowly edged over the side and I froze, the adrenaline started pumping through my body. I heard my mum shouting at me to move away from the edge before I fell, but I just laughed and continued to walk near the edge. I sat there hanging my feet over the edge watching waves until they crashed onto the shore and fade away. It started to lightly ran which made and grass on the cliff a little slippery, so I had to be careful when walking.
The rain didn’t bother me though I was still having a good time with my family and nothing was going to stop that.
I stood up and went to go stand with my dad, who was also watching the waves. I watched them with him for a little then went to go ask my mum something, but I completely forgot about the grass being wet. I stepped on the grass and slipped, first my feet then my legs went over the edge of the cliff. My dad just stood there and watched me almost fall to my death, but he didn’t seem to mind.
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ReplyDeleteHi Megan. I really enjoyed the way you described your sense of taste in paragraph one 'I inhaled a huge scent of ocean as the wind hit my lips, I tasted the salty sea air.' This piece of writing reminds me of when my family and I drove up to Auckland from Christchurch, it had amazing views but were very scary. Next time maybe add more details to your paragraphs but apart from that it was great! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Juanita I will keep this in mind for the next creative writing
DeleteMegan, I really enjoy reading your writing. As like Juanita i enjoyed the description of "I inhaled a huge scent of ocean as the wind hit my lips, I tasted the salty sea air". This piece reminded me of when we headed up to Picton for our year 8 camps and saw all the cliffs. Next time you could add maybe fr your paragraph 4 join it up with your paragragh 3.
ReplyDeleteThanks Xing, this will help me with my next creative writing
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